Ms.+Frisby+and+the+Rats+of+NIMH

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Samantha: You did very well on your Mrs. Frisby mini-essays. One or two seem to be missing, a few are spare in details, and sometimes you either take too long to get to the point ("I am going to tell you..."). However, in terms of comprehension and completeness, you've done fine work. One suggestion. Try to write these thinking question reponses with less summary of information and more arguing for a point. Thus, I want to see you start with a thesis statement that is developed with supporting details. The main idea leads the way, as it were. Overall grade is a 93. Mr. B. on 2/2/11

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 * Ms. Frisby and the Rats of NIMH: Final Essay [Draft]:**

DEAR SAMANTHA: YOU EARNED A 120-28 = 92 ON YOUR FINAL FRISBY ESSAY. TO RAISE THE GRADE MAKE ALL OF THE FIXES THAT I HAVE HIGHLIGHTED. MOST IMPORTANTLY, AVOID SELF-REFERRING REMARKS LIKE "I WILL TELL YOU," OR "THIS PARAGRAPH IS ABOUT. " JUST SAY SOMETHING LIKE "ANOTHER EXAMPLE WHERE THE MESSAGE OF... IS SHOWN IS WHEN..."

BASICALLY, YOU NEED TO RETELL KEY SECTIONS OF THE NOVEL THAT SUPPORT WHAT YOU SAY IS THE MESSAGE OF THE NOVEL. AND A MESSAGE IS NOT THE SAME THING AS THEME.

PLEASE MAKE THESE FIXES BEFORE APRIL 8.

MR. BASKIN ON 3/24/11

** Grading Checklist for Final Reflection/Essay on ** **__ Mrs. Frisby and the Rats of NIMH __**

** Perfect Score = 120 points **

** //Heading//—4 pts. total **
 * ** Name—1 pt. **
 * ** Date—1 pt. **
 * ** Subject—1 pt. **
 * ** Teacher or Grade-Section—1 pt. **

Title—4 pts. total

Hilarity in Education: The Message of
Baskin in Da House”; or flip the order, put title first, followed by colon, followed by the theme or message)

** //Introduction//—16 pts. ** ** Quote; Strong, Vivid Description of Arresting ** ** Detail; Do NOT Ask a Question!)—4 points **
 * ** Attention Grabber (Bold statement or a **
 * ** Announce the Title and the Author—4 pts. **
 * ** Thesis Statement/Message to Prove—4 points **
 * How It Will Be Proved—4 points

** //Body Paragraph// (28 pts. Total) ** · ** State the point—4 pts. **

**__ Text Evidence __**
· ** Quote—4 pts ** ** __Or__ ** · ** Short, Lead-In That Introduces the Example--4 pts. ** ** AND… ** · ** Who was Involved—4 pts. **  · ** What (Where) Happened Immediately Before— ** ** 4 pts. **  · ** What Happened During the Event—4 pts. **  · ** What Happened After--4 pts. **  · ** Explain What It Means/What It Shows—4 pts. **

** //Body Paragraph// (28 pts. Total) ** · ** State the point—4 pts. ** ** __Text Evidence__ ** · ** Quote—4 pts ** ** __Or__ ** · ** Short, Lead-In That Introduces the Example--4 pts. ** ** AND… ** · ** Who was Involved—4 pts. **  · ** What (Where) Happened Immediately Before— ** ** 4 pts. **  · ** What Happened During the Event—4 pts. **  · ** What Happened After--4 pts. ** · Explain What It Means/What It Shows—4 pts.

** //Body Paragraph// (28 pts. Total) ** · ** State the point—4 pts. ** ** __Text Evidence__ ** · ** Quote—4 pts ** ** __Or__ ** · Short, Lead-In That Introduces the Example--4 pts. AND… · ** Who was Involved—4 pts. **  · ** What (Where) Happened Immediately Before— ** ** 4 pts. **  · ** What Happened During the Event—4 pts. **  · ** What Happened After--4 pts. ** · Explain What It Means/What It Shows—4 pts.

** //Conclusion// (12 pts.) ** It; Describe How You Hope Others Will Use it or How Others Have, In Fact, Used it)—4 pts.
 * ** Summarize or Restate the Main—4 pts. **
 * Remind Reader Why this Is Significant—4 pts.
 * Make a Connection (Say How You Will Use